Alone in a train
i was chugging alone nicely
across the mountains
and across the valleys
carefree...
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Alone in a train
i was chugging alone nicely
across the mountains
and across the valleys
carefree
with nothing to worry
i was making my way
one station at a time
stopping once in a while
at a land unknown
i ventured to explore
only to come back running
into this massive metal shell
that is now my home (temporarily)
as usual, the train rolled by
from the station from where you got in
riding all alone
i noticed you as came inside
silently and steadly
the train took an alternate route
into a land that i knew once
a land i was once part of
a land that is now far far away
in the middle of the night
i step out
into this long lost land
or so i thought
step by step
fear all over the face
i make my way towards you
i wait in anticipation
i wait to hold your hand
and walk across this "fertile" land
i wait to hold your hand
i wait to travel into this land
i wait to end my journey
end my journey
with you!
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{alternate ending}
step by step
fear all over the face
i make my towards you
hold your hand
and walk together
into this setting sun
to end my journey
i wait,
only to be jolted back to reality
by the thundering whistle of the train
only to realize i was dreaming all the while
with my journey not even started
i am dreaming to end my journey
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note: there are a lot of "empty" lines in here. some have been already mentioned in other poems, hence i didnt feel the need to mention them again in this. So, yes it will feel "empty/meaningless".
This is my entry to the express yourself contest #23 by Writer at Heart
Hi spk100 !
That was a wonderful journey :-))....really really nice !
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Thank you Ajit :)
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hey spk ................ I read it again...............simply great!
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Hey spk100,
Nicely written...Good luck for the contest!
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Thank you Elegance :)
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Lovely one, SPK...
Cheers,
Me :)
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Thank you Viv :)
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The words may seem empty but they truly are not... they hold meaning to those of us that read them and envision what you describe and say. I liked it and, as always, enjoy your poems very much.
Viv
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Thank you Bhavna :)
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whoaaa tatzz d frst poem i m readin wid an alternate end n tatzzz super coooooooooool.. :-)
itzz worth d waittt typess.. :-)
u've writtennn it well... done justice to d pic...
i thought d lines were pretty mch in sync.. cudnt figure whch one were meaningless or smthnnnn...
i likedd d frst endin better...
i wait to hold your hand
i wait to travel into this land
i wait to end my journey
end my journey
with you!
rgds
Bhavna
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